It’s time again for Susanna Leonard Hill’s Annual Valentiny Writing Contest! These contests are always so much fun. This year we were to write a Valentine’s Day children’s story about a character who is curious. It could be no longer than 214 words. Here is my entry. Thanks for reading!
214 words
Valentine Wonders
by Cheryl Secomb
Valentine wondered about many things.
He wondered what he would find under that rock
or where a puddle went once it was gone
or why his tail was so long.
Valentine wondered most about the sparkling stars. What did they really look like?
Because he was a tiny, little mouse, he knew he would never reach them. But still he gazed and wondered, wishing he could see them better.
On Valentine’s favorite holiday, he was busy baking heart-shaped cookies when he noticed a new neighbor moving in next door.
As she carried her belongings inside, one box made Valentine especially curious. It was longer than the mouse who carried it.
What could it be?
That night, Valentine sat in his mousehole, wondering and wondering about the mysterious box. Finally, Valentine decided to visit his neighbor. He took a plate of cookies with him.
Valentine knocked on her door.
She opened it and smiled.
Valentine introduced himself, handing her the cookies.
“Thank you!” she said. “I’m Violet. Please come in.”
Valentine looked around and spotted the empty box. What could have been inside? And then he saw it.
“What is that?” he asked.
“It’s a telescope!” she said. “Come and see!”
So Valentine did.
And to his surprise . . .
Valentine reached the stars.
This is a very sweet story and I love that Valentine discovered both Violet and her telescope. Well done. And, good luck in the contest!
Thanks so much, Colleen!
How sweet, Violet made his dream come true. Good luck with this!
Thank you, Eleanor!
Lovely. Best Wishes!
Thank you so much, Aileen!
What a cute little mouse! Great job!
Thank you, Kelly!
Sweet story. I’m partial to stories with mice and a mouse named Valentine is so perfect. Thanks for sharing!
Thank you so much, Heather!
What a great story. Totally didn’t see the telescope coming! Good luck!
Thank you so much, Nancy!
Cute little mousies seeing the stars together- lovely!
Thank you, Lauri!
So sweet and thoughtful-great heart 🙂 Good luck!
Thanks so much, Charlotte!
Very sweet, friendship and stars! Good luck.
Thank you, Jean!
Such a sweet story, Cheryl! I LOVE the things that Valentine wondered about at the beginning – so perfectly child-like 🙂 And I loved his curiosity about that mysterious box… and how perfect that a telescope was inside it! Thanks for joining in the Valentiny fun!
Ah, thank you so much, Susanna. Thank you for having such fun contests! 🙂
Very sweet story! What a beautiful surprise!
Thank you so much, Debbie!